Feature Story Peer-Response

    Naya’s blog

a.     You’ve got 2 close-ended questions, but the rest are good, open-ended ones.

b.     Two more questions you could ask your Grandpa: What were your parents like? Did they inspire you in any way?

c.      A question for your Grandma: Did he change your outlook on life?

d.     If your grandpa had any siblings, maybe you could interview them. Or friends of your grandparents.

e.     1. The audience is people who enjoy hearing about other people’s lives. The purpose of this piece is to share a story with others.

2. The writer’s main point in these questions is unclear to me, but when they find their main topic, I think it will be.

3. I’m most interested in question 7, because it will reveal a lot about her Grandpa.

4. Question 1 could have more detail, like they could add how it affected him.

5. I didn’t really find any questions unclear, but some questions were sort of redundant, like just rephrasing. Nice job!!

Michael’s blog

a.     You’ve got several close-ended questions, mostly the first couple ones. Maybe you can combine some of them and add more open ended ones.

b.     “Do you have any regrets?” “Did you wish you had stayed longer?”

c.      “How often did you see him when he was actively serving?”

d.     Maybe you could interview your grandma or their children. (If applicable.)

e.     The audience is people who enjoy learning about the military and people’s experiences. The purpose of this piece is to share his grandpa’s story. The writer’s main point in this story is to learn and share about his grandpa’s military experience. I’m most interested in question 13 because it’s more open-ended. The first couple questions could use more detail since they’re close-ended and seem like filler questions. I didn’t find any questions unclear.

f.      Great work!!! J

               Grace’s blog

a.     I think you have mostly open-ended questions but some could use “and why?”

b.     “Were you ever scared?” “Was it hard to find a job?”

c.      “Did you approve of his job?” for either source

d.     If your grandpa had siblings maybe them, or other kids if he had them.

e.     The audience is people who enjoy hearing about police experience and the purpose is to share her grandpa’s story. The writer’s main point is to learn about and share the story with others. I’m most interested in question 8 because it sounds like it would have a good answer. Maybe you could add “and why,” to some questions but other than that you did really well and I didn’t find any unclear questions.

f.      Well done! J