The Big Day
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NOTES
Who: Man in car, bride, guy in chair, groom, bridesmaid, audience, minister
What: Man is late for wedding, bride/man in chair is impatient, bride is nervous
When: Midday
Where: Wedding at a church, car guy was driving by fields and all sorts of environments
Why: Car guy is anxious because he's late for the wedding
How: He has to drive very far through all these environments and things get in the way
Man in car is nervous/anxious. Wiped sweat off his face. Bridesmaids stroking bride's dress. Bride looks happy. Man is speeding through forest. Man in chair looks older than bride. Kind of weird that he's in the room. Man zooms by camera. Bride seems anxious, touching and spinning her ring. Guy in car checks watch. Man in chair also checks watch. Weather is bad for man in car, gets stuck behind slow trailer, he has to slow down. Bride holds hand with father, smiling. Man zooms by and passes the trailer. Dad (chair guy), looks towards windows. Car guy going through all these environments, all the different environments. Mountains to beaches to fields to everything. Bride looks out window, waiting for car guy. Car guy gets into a more urban area, he's at a train track and the train gets in front of him. He gets super mad and screams at the train. Dad closes door. Jumps to the ceremony. Minister reading to bride and the groom who's been introduced. Car guy runs into the church while the ceremony is happens. Bride and groom are surprised to see him. Groom doesn't look happy, bride looks guilty.
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BRIDE (Anne Smith-Walker)
Why were you looking out the window as if you were waiting for someone? I was waiting for my friend to show up because I secretly invited him. Don't tell John.
Why were you fidgeting with your ring? I was nervous that he wouldn't show up on time, or at all. I really wanted him to come, but I had invited him last-minute, so I guess I had it coming and knew that he might not show up. And as much as I love John, it's different than what I had with Sam. But my father felt strongly that I should choose John. He's rich, and our families have known each other for decades. But it's just not the same.
Were you looking forward to getting married? Of course I was looking forward to getting married. I was very excited, but nervous at the same time.
CAR GUY (Sam Johnson)
Why were you so late for the wedding? I live very far away from the church. And somehow everything that could've happened to make me late, happened.
Why did the bride and groom look at you that way? They are very nice people with good values, so me being late probably got them mad. I never meant to ruin their big day. This stupid trailer got in front of me. Then I was at a railroad track, and of course, the train had to come at the very moment I drove up. How unlucky!
CHAIR GUY (Bill Smith)
Why were you in the room with the bride? My daughter and I are very close, and she requested I stay in the room with her so she would feel more comfortable. After all, it can be very nerve-racking to stand up in front of a lot of people, even if you are marrying your fiancée.
What are you to the bride? I am the bride's father.
Why did you check your watch? I was seeing what time it was. I was pretty annoyed waiting for that boy who Anne invited last-minute. I love my daughter, but she can be tough sometimes.
GROOM (John Walker)
Who was the man who interrupted your wedding? My bride's ex-boyfriend who she is still good friends with.
Why did it seem like you don't like him? Don't tell Anne this, but I'm kind of jealous of him. I said "no" to inviting him. He's always at the right place at the right time, well except for today of course. I wasn't expecting him to show up to our wedding so that was kind of an unpleasant surprise. But I guess it didn't "ruin" our wedding day.
Are you angry that he showed up? I'm angry that he just came running in like he could do whatever he wanted. He had his chance with Anne and he blew it! I was in the middle of marrying the love of my life, and he had no right to come barging in to ruin it.
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The Big Day
On a September 27th, in an old Texas church, two people were starting the next chapter of their lives by getting married.
The pair were looking forward to this day for months, and finally the big day arrived.
"I was looking forward to getting married," bride Anne Smith-Walker said. "I was very excited, but nervous at the same time."
But several miles away, speeding through forests, fields, and highways, was a man, who was very late for the wedding.
"I live very far away from the church," driver Sam Johnson said. "And somehow everything that could've happened to make me late, happened."
Johnson seemed very stressed while driving to the church, and he managed to hit all sorts of roadblocks.
"This stupid trailer got in front of me." he said. "Then I was at a railroad track, and of course, the train had to come at the very moment I drove up. How unlucky!"
At the same time, the bride was watching the window looking seemingly anxious.
"I was nervous that he wouldn't show up on time, or at all." Smith-Walker said.
"I really wanted him to come, but I had invited him last-minute so I guess I had it coming and knew that he might not show up."
As Smith-Walker twisted her ring, doubts began to arise.
"As much as I love John, it's different than what I had with Sam." she said. "But my father felt strongly that I should choose John. He's rich, and our families have known each other for decades. But it's just not the same."
The bride's father seemed a bit nervous as well.
"I was pretty annoyed waiting for that boy Anne invited last-minute." father Bill Smith said. "I love my daughter, but she can be tough sometimes."
He was also in the room with the bride, which isn't traditionally common.
"My daughter and I are very close, and she requested I stay in the room with her so she would feel more comfortable." Smith said. "After all it can be very nerve-wrecking to stand up in front of a lot of people, even if you are marrying your fiancée."
When Johnson came bustling up the steps in the middle of the ceremony, there were several shocked faces. One was the groom.
"I'm angry that he just came running in like he could do whatever he wanted." groom John Walker said. "He had his chance with Anne and he blew it! I was in the middle of marrying the love of my life, and he had no right to come barging in to ruin it."
It was clear Walker had strong feelings about Johnson.
"Don't tell Anne this, but I'm kind of jealous of him." he said. "I said 'no' to inviting him. He's always at the right place at the right time, well except for today of course."
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